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Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#1  Unread postby EnglishSpot » Wed Mar 11, 2015 10:50 pm


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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#2  Unread postby Susie570 » Wed Mar 11, 2015 11:31 pm


:oops: That's a Great ad!! Much better than mine :/ :oops:
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Post Number:#3  Unread postby EnglishSpot » Wed Mar 11, 2015 11:41 pm


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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#4  Unread postby Miss M » Thu Mar 12, 2015 12:05 am


That's a great ad! :)
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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#5  Unread postby cmfarm » Thu Mar 12, 2015 6:31 am


I post on CL a lot as well as browse quite a bit. Here are some suggestions. Make it shorter and with not so many spaces. People will be looking through lots of adds and most won't bother to read something long.

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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#6  Unread postby Zass » Thu Mar 12, 2015 11:41 am


The only thing that jumped out at me was:

Bunnies in the 5lb size do best in a 24x24 cage


I would prefer if it read:

"Bunnies in the 5lb size do best in at least a 24x24 inch cage."

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Post Number:#7  Unread postby Miss M » Thu Mar 12, 2015 11:07 pm


:yeahthat: I do have an almost 5lb bunny in a 24x24, but I wish I could give him bigger. :) At least he has a wooden house that he adores.
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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#8  Unread postby baefull.wolfbunnies » Fri Mar 13, 2015 1:46 am


Awesome ad Spot. If I ever sell my popples I would like to burrow some of the ad from you. :)
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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#9  Unread postby Marinea » Fri Mar 13, 2015 8:04 am


cmfarm wrote:I post on CL a lot as well as browse quite a bit. Here are some suggestions. Make it shorter and with not so many spaces. People will be looking through lots of adds and most won't bother to read something long.


I respectfully disagree. If I am buying, I much prefer an ad with lots of information and pictures as opposed to "Bunny rabbits for sale. I have lots." Maybe it's not true, but I tend to believe there is a correlation between the detail in the ad and the condition and care being given to the animals.
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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#10  Unread postby Schipperkesue » Fri Mar 13, 2015 8:26 am


Marinea wrote:
cmfarm wrote:I post on CL a lot as well as browse quite a bit. Here are some suggestions. Make it shorter and with not so many spaces. People will be looking through lots of adds and most won't bother to read something long.


I respectfully disagree. If I am buying, I much prefer an ad with lots of information and pictures as opposed to "Bunny rabbits for sale. I have lots." Maybe it's not true, but I tend to believe there is a correlation between the detail in the ad and the condition and care being given to the animals.


I also find the spaces add to the readability of your passage. They help the eye stay on track. Great ad!

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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#11  Unread postby cmfarm » Fri Mar 13, 2015 10:27 am


Marinea wrote:
cmfarm wrote:I post on CL a lot as well as browse quite a bit. Here are some suggestions. Make it shorter and with not so many spaces. People will be looking through lots of adds and most won't bother to read something long.


I respectfully disagree. If I am buying, I much prefer an ad with lots of information and pictures as opposed to "Bunny rabbits for sale. I have lots." Maybe it's not true, but I tend to believe there is a correlation between the detail in the ad and the condition and care being given to the animals.


I do agree that adds that a very vague are very annoying, I just thought it might be a bit long and it might be good to shorten it. It isn't a bad add just might loose some peoples interest when they see a really long add.

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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#12  Unread postby Susie570 » Fri Mar 13, 2015 10:31 am


I also tend to think that the folks who actually take the time to read a longer, more detailed ad (and then show they have read it when you talk to them by asking appropriate questions) are going to be better bunny parents than those who won't take the time to read it, just see a few pictures of 'cute bunnies' and make you repeat everything you took the time to already state in the ad. :p
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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#13  Unread postby WhWRabbitry » Fri Mar 13, 2015 2:15 pm


I think it's a great ad! I love all the details/information given. It makes me think good quality breeder when I read it.

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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#14  Unread postby Schipperkesue » Fri Mar 13, 2015 2:45 pm


Here is my thinking...if they don't have time to read a long ad, I really don't want to sell them a living creature that may take more time away from their busy lives. Perhaps it is that I prefer a longer ad myself. More information means I don't have to waste any of my time to call and find out what I need to know.

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Re: Is it a good ad?

Post Number:#15  Unread postby ladysown » Fri Mar 13, 2015 4:21 pm


I read through your ad and wondered this .... what are the names of the other two in the litter? And why didn't you talk about them.

if you aren't selling them you should't mention them.
If you are selling them you should say "see my other ads" so that people can learn about the other two.

I also wondered if the $15 was just a deposit or the full purchase price. If not the full purchase price you should make it very clear what the full price is. Otherwise just say bunny must be paid for before i will hold it for you.
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